Lost amidst the veil
of leaves, I catch her tears as
pendulous branches
cinch her lungs, suspend
her midair, waiting til death—
he returns to me.
—Nortina
Been wanting to jump on this 2018 Haiku Challenge, hosted by Ericajean over at The Write Web, for a while now.
Week 2 of the challenge is all about writing the senryu, which has the same 5-7-5 line structure as a haiku, but thematically focuses on human nature and emotions, while the haiku makes reference to seasons and nature.
Not sure if my poem qualifies as a senryu, since it still has nature in it, but it was definitely fun to write.
By the way, today is my blogging anniversary! Yes, I’ve been writing “love stories (and poems) with a twist and other peculiar tales” officially for four years now! In celebrating my anniversary, I used a line from the very first poem I ever posted on this blog to inspire the above senryu:
…And I left her skinny ass swinging from the branch of a willow tree…
Lovely Curses 
Congrats on the anniversary! And as I’ve said a number of times, I admire poets.
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Thanks! 😊
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Thank you so much , Nortina for the shout out! I really enjoyed your haiku! Sometimes Senryus will blend into the haikus to form something magical and that is what your words did for me. Very beautifully written!
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Thank you! 🙂
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Haiku is one my favorite forms of poetry because it says so much with so little and is still able to play by the rules. Love it!
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Benjamin,
This is why I love haiku, such a strict form but that is what stirs the creativity!
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I agree. So minimalist yet powerful in its simplistic delivery.
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It’s why I love haiku too. It helps to hone my writing because it restricts me to saying only what is necessary, what has a purpose. It definitely makes for a more powerful poem!
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So true.
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