When the team heard the dam explode, they knew they had limited time to make it to safety.
“We have to jump! Paddling to land is useless in these waters. The surge will throw us right into the rocks!” Tim yelled. He had convinced the wedding party to go whitewater rafting two days before the ceremony. A bonding trip to connect with his future in-laws. His sexually liberated mother-in-law who spent her days behind computer screens writing pornography scripts. His retired, Hall of Fame, hockey player father-in-law whose early onset Parkinson’s reminded him daily of his record-breaking 15 concussions during his career. His self-proclaimed prophetess sister-in-law who had dreamt of missiles falling from the sky the night before.
His fiancé had told him when the terror threat level was high, the last place to be was near the Hoover Dam, but he couldn’t linger on that. He instructed everyone to hold hands. On three, they jumped, just as the giant wave lunged the raft towards the rocks.
word count: 149
—Nortina
This is in response to Mondays Finish the Story: a flash fiction challenge where we provide you with a new photo each week, and the first sentence of a story. Your challenge is to finish the story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided.
By the way, my title is a pun on “jumping the broom,” which is typically done at African American wedding ceremonies here in the States.
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Nortina ~ You have just described the most interesting set of inlaws imaginable ~ I love this ~ What a way to have a pre-wedding get-together ~ 🙂 Very well written 🙂
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Rather unusual thrill seeking by a wedding party! Loved your cast of characters!
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I love your description of the family! I hope they all survive. 🙂
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That was a really fun read Nortina, lots of energy- well done!
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Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed reading 🙂
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This is my favorite, so far! Really well done. Thanks
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This made my day! Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Thanks for the explanation at the end about ‘jumping the broom’. I did enjoy this Nortina, the family one marries into can be interesting there is no doubt.
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No problem. I’m not the best at titles, but when I do come up with a good one, I want to make sure everyone understands it. 🙂 Thanks for reading!
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Those in-laws sound funny!
I hope they all survived because this is screaming for a part 2.
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I don’t know where I come up with these characters. They just pop in my head, and I run with it. Lol. But I definitely have to write more about this family. They are too hilarious!
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Sorry. Missed one grammatical which is my fault. Saw the warning as I hit send.:)
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Really liked your story. I’m wondering if there will be a wedding??? For a second pair of eyes, I use Grammarly. the free verson. It catches most if not all of my grammatical errors. You might want to check it out if you write a lot. Even works on emails.
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Thanks, I’ll look into that.
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Whew! That was a close call! Sounds like unusual and quirky in-laws! I enjoyed your story Nortina. 🙂
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Thanks. They are quite unusual, aren’t they? I’d love to be a fly on a wall at that family reunion. 😀
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That would be fun!
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The family sounds like you should write more about them. If they survive this, that is… Good story 🙂
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I actually do want to write more about them! Especially that mother-in-law! Lol
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Yep, she sounds like an interesting character. But the Hall of Fame father-in-law who’s struggling with the consequences of playing hockey when nobody cared about concussion is interesting, too.
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I love your story Nortina! The descriptions of the in-laws: Perfect! One correction,if I may is that you missed the “y” in wedding party. Thanks for participating again in the MFtS, and I hope that you return next week! Be well… ^..^
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I’m glad you enjoyed it & thanks for catching that! I swear I can read a post 100 times, and I still miss a tiny edit. It’s nice to have a second set of eyes. Lol
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YW! It happens to me all the time! My friend Anneli always catches these tiny necessary edits for me! 🙂 Be well… ^..^
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