A body suddenly crashed through a plate glass window at the Brigadier’s house. Isabella, was alone at the dining room table eating breakfast, and nearly cracked her tooth on the fork at the sudden sound of shattering glass.
“Call Fernando!” She wrapped her robe around herself and rushed to window. There, a young girl lay, no older than sixteen, a make-shift noose of bed sheets, dresses and pantyhoses tied around her neck.
“Don Fernando is on his way, Señora,” the male servant said.
“Check the roof! El cupable may still be there!” She felt the girl’s neck, but already knew from the stiffness of her body that she was dead.
The servant returned shortly after with a note. “Señora, no one is there.” He handed Isabella the folded, manila paper. “Mira. She jumped. Se suicidó.”
Isabella took the letter and opened it. Tears streamed down her cheeks as she read the girl’s final words: “Digale al Brigadier que lo amo.”
word count: 147
—Nortina
This is in response to Mondays Finish the Story: a flash fiction challenge where we provide you with a new photo each week, and the first sentence of a story. Your challenge is to finish the story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided.
A brilliant episode~ Love and death in the setting of a Columbian villa ~ A wonderful take on the prompt ~ 🙂
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Love – especially unreturned – can cause such heartache, even in one so young. Such a sad story, Nortina. Very well written. 🙂
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What a sad story. Good take on the prompt. 🙂
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A great sense of place and characters. Well done 😀
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Very nice- The picture is very Colombian villa so that was a good take on the prompt 🙂
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Wonderful story Nortina! This was filled with feeling and emotion…that poor girl to have loved the Brigadier so much that she gave up her life… Well done!
Thank you for participating the the MFtS challenge and stay tuned for what is coming up! There are thrillers on the way! Be well…. ^..^
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I totally get that telenovela vibe. Poor girl, though… Good job!
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You always write with such a feeling for character and your descriptions are so vivid. So well done once again.
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Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed reading. 🙂
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That’s sad that her love for him caused her to commit suicide. Great story Nortina.
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Thanks Joy. I really wanted to give this one a sad, telenovela kind of feel to it.
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What is a telenovela?
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It’s like a Spanish soap opera.
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Oh, okay. Thank you. I had never heard of it.
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Really? You should watch one. They’re all over the Spanish cable channels like Univision, etc. Of course, they’re in Spanish, but after a while, you get the gist of what’s going on. Lol
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I will have to do that!
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